Business Plan porposal comments.. =)

i'd joined a businessp lan competition on the 1st of august, attending two workshops..then.. handling in our first business plan porposal, on the spetember... we got our results..

sadly... we didn't manage to make it to the topten.. Less advantage as v are the oni ones in foundation yr.. other participants are from degree and sam and alevels..

Some of the comments i find useful:

• fragrance- brand is rather inappropiate.. tHE JUDGE IS rite.. coz.. i'm using that name for a wine product.
• Wine- would the government be supportive of such a product? Wel, i did mention in the porposal that i'll be meeting up the government for lisence and approval
• kNOWLEDGE OF PLanting fruit? Wel. i do have as my uncle is planting dragon fruit now.. just that its not stated in my proposal, doesn't mean i simply do k?
• Fragrance? TOO CLICHE!! aNOTHER comment on my brand.. now i think back,its more suitable for a perfume?
• cROP FAilure? - The judge thought i'm not conversant about what i'm doing.. you think i didn't do research? I EVEN know what type of pesticides feed on my dragon fruit lar.. SNAILS!!lolz

Well, it wasn't bad for a first try.. cause it could have been better.. i should have put in more effort on my proposal.. thus.. the failure is at my responsibility.. NO more next time.. cause I'LL BE BACK... with better ideas..

Thanks to the judges... now.. i noe.. what to prepare to be back.. i'll improve so definitely.. wait for me 3RD business plan competition!!